Outline Rough Skeleton

I’ve been looking at Chuck Wendig’s outline advices here, and I tried to give it a shot, but the outline I ended up with is kind of all over the place…

Oh well.

Here’s the overarching summary of the whole story, including the bits that’s too unedited to end up here:

In a world where your rank decides everything you can have and everything you can be, entering the Arena to try for the Programme is the only shot at upgrading to a better life. For Alistair, getting into the Programme is the only way to save his sister from being a Delta, the lowest of all ranks – something not even considered, or treated as, a human. Along the way, he met a few who were willing to help him, but their individual motives and unknown origins could, eventually, end up dragging him off the beaten, worn and tough but present path into the gaping unknown.

This outline is kind of mainly driven by character, with the story unfolding around the main character, Alistair Frost, in a colony world on the moon a few centuries after Earth is gone and computers became obsolete, because people could literally plug themselves into the virtual world that is named the Net as of now, because I can’t find a better name. Leave me a suggestion if possible!

There’s quite a lot of localized lingo that would be explained in the story, hopefully.


The story starts with Alistair watching his adopted parents get sentenced to life in Tartarus Colony for treason, and then he was separated from Elysia, his adopted sister. Because they commited treason, they were stripped of their Omega ranks (Omega & Alpha is highest in this world) and their children were demoted, too.

Because, when his parents died, this couple saved him, he decided to repay them by trying for Omega/Alpha so that he could adopt Elysia out of the system, too. However, for someone demoted to being promoted directly to Delta, the slave class, after he hits thirteen, his only way out is to enter the Arena, where he has to play in the game to earn a chance to enter the Institute, and possibly the Academy, to get at least a Beta (normal citizen) place, if not an Alpha/Omega position of power.

The slaves, Deltas, belong to the Council, the ruling board that governs all the Colonies, made of the strongest Alpha/Omega from each Colony. They look at the Arena to find a prodigy to groom as a successor.

In the transport for Alistair to another Colony where he would be raised, he was left in a holding barrack with a lot of other kids. He left the place, saying that he’s going to the shared toilet outside the bunks, with the actual intention of looking for Elysia, to reassure her, even if he has no idea where she is.

However, they were next to the door opening to the empty air and someone was landing that night, apparently, forcing him to hide in the nearest storage facility to avoid detection.

The airlock opened to allow a recently returned spaceship to enter. There was a real buzz because this spaceship has apparently found something on Earth, marking the third return trip from Earth. There was nothing form the first two trips noteworthy, except for a whole new supply of water and some animals to be bred and examined – to see if they’re edible. Nobody thought of going back to Earth because it’s wild there now, uncivilized and dangerous.

The area he was hiding in was dusty, and the door opened while they carted in a pod. When they left, discussing their intention to come back the next day to mark the package and decide what to do with this thing, Alistair got curious and came out of hiding and realised that there was a boy in the pod. He was lit with the soft blue light emitting from the pod. As he got close, he realised that there was a weird board with loads of little pushy alphabets on it, and that when he pressed the circle button with a line in it, the whole thing lit up. The most notable thing was the little hole/depression with a…tree? Cactus? Psi? Trident? Next to it. It matches with the symbol on his key. The one his father gave him and made him promise to keep until it is time to use it.

When he was with Ivan and Bryn (his adopted parents), they have told him about the old world back on Earth, with wonders like computers and phones. He asked about it, but he received no answer. In fact, Ivan and Bryn got warnings for raising forbidden things – he learnt his lesson and kept his mouth shut for them. This key was one of those things he wasn’t supposed to have too.

But anyway, he found the little ‘lock’ matches with his ‘key’ and he plugged it in, startling himself when there was a ‘ding’. Then there was an initialising that asked him to enter his username (?) he wasn’t sure what it was. Hesitant, he decided to type in Acrisio, because it was almost the only thing he associated with his parents, just like the key. Surprisingly, it worked.

The pod split open, and the boy woke up.

They had a real argument, with the boy insisting to meet his parents and siblings and looking devastated and then completely, utterly disbelieving and shocked to find that it was no longer the twenty-first century and him freaking out “You’re a human? You’re alive?”

In the end, the boy apparently ‘remembered’ something, and looked really freaked, then he asked in a small voice, “It’s really been __ centuries since you came to the moon and never came back?”

Then, insert conversation where Alistair figured out that Regin was hosting an AI, a Watcher AI who’s been watching from Earth, with the horrible signals, the buzzy and static version of what’s going on. And he’s updating Regin. And Alastair realised that, with Regin, he’d have a really great shot at winning the game by breaking it, by cheating. He’d be able to hit Omega/Alpha, if he had Regin around. And Regin was just confused and lost and utterly no clue what’s going on, so it wasn’t hard to persuade him that this has to be done, especially since his AI, Sicarius, has not much idea either, having been blotchy and limited to the edge of the Net. AIs are legendary in their ability, and they are dangerous and powerful in the Net, with one on his side, he’d be able to get Elysia. He was willing to manipulate this person for that. After all, Regin was just a stranger. And Elysia was more important.

Besides, without him, Regin wouldn’t be awake.

They logged in, with a port they dusted off in the warehouse, using Acrisio’s hours, before realising that as a watcher, Regin has unlimited access really, and his AI pretty much ensures that he cannot be tracked by any of the other AIs, who don’t see him as a user. That was also when he realised that his house was a fragment of Regin’s AI, a glitch caused by the fact that Regin’s AI was not fully uploaded into his Avatar, leaving behind 2 % that latched onto Ianthe Bentley’s user because Ianthe was Bennett’s friend and they were both hackers. Then Ianthe passed the house on in his family together with the thumb drive – the key to Alistair – in real world so that someday, he could fulfill the promise to Bennett-chan and revive her little brother, Regin.

But the most important thing was that Alastair discovered, from Regin, that this Net was half game-platform (RPG) and half for preserving human memories and imprints, which meant that there were pre-coded choice for you to choose your avatar, and customise the abilities. Because it was not developed, it is up to the individual user to code the online avatar, and without any laptops and pcs and mobiles, there was no way for the people to do so, nor was here knowledge to do so – the Net is entirely sustained by the solar panels and the repair & watcher & guardian AIs who would code the default avatar for every new user, a human replica of themselves in real life. With Regin, however, his AI has knowledge of the old world unlike the AIs who are created every century to replace the old ones who ‘retire’ and become dormant codes, hence the new AIs wouldn’t know what computers and things like that are either, just that they are forbidden directives. Regin’s ability to hack also allowed him to use the computer on his stasis pod to connect to the Net and customise their avatars and mask both of them. Then, realising that they needed to go, Regin plucked the laptop out – surprising the hell out of Alastair – and grabbed a charger and followed Alastair back to the bunk. He hid the laptop – a handheld model that is folded to be the size of a larger book with the book jacket to go with it in a corner and they were scolded. Before, in his hacking, he had already registered himself in the system as ____. Whenever a new person is born, they report to the council who would tell an AI (Guardian/Watcher) who would update the status in the records library, the same for someone who died. Regin simply hacked it and added an entry for himself – it was really easy enough, name, parents, date of birth, status. Pick deceased family and you’re ready to go.

The two of them were sent to Vesta (One of the colonies?) and they tried to stay safe. Met Jack, and, in the orphanage port, found a user named Rhea who is unidentified, too. Regin’s AI identified her as an AI, but also a user, similar to Regin. It worried the two of them.

They signed up for the tournament and entered the arena, given a name each. Minimum of 10 to upgrade to Beta, above 50 for a chance to enter the Institute or the Academy if you’re not already a child of either an Alpha or an Omega. The person you get could be user, could be AI, nobody knows. Except, with Regin, it was truly easy to just breeze through, and with Rhea on their side, it was frankly amazing. Jack, too, helped them.

Except, Rhea wasn’t in the game, but Jack was. And Jack picked Regin’s name out – Aloysius Reginald Chance. And he didn’t know who it was, but he was determined to hit at least Omega/Alpha, and there was only one name left.

He shot Regin out.

They have to spend one month connected, however, they are woken once every week to exercise, and he realised that time that Regin was taken away.

He tried not to feel guilty, because he wasn’t friends with Regin, he just needed Regin to get his sister back, and Regin knew that. He still felt bad, though. And he can’t even hate Jack – Jack was doing this for his sister, too, his twin, Jill, who wasn’t able to participate because she cannot connect. Alistair had never heard of that condition, but he was willing to give Jack the benefit of the doubt, especially since Rhea appears to believe it.

He got into the Institute/Academy.


Any advice? It would be largely appreciated! I’m trying NaNoWriMo for a second time, but this is the first time I’m doing an original work, and I would really love it if you would tell me what you think of this plot. There’s some other characters too, and arcs for the other characters, but this is the first main character.

And, if you could think of a name for a virtual world or a title for the story that you wouldn’t mind me using, please drop it here too!

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Dead and Gone

I was just trawling through my homework when this song came up on the radio, and I really liked it. It took me a while to find it, but here it is!

And, my all-over-the-place outline is up. Check it out!


Dead and Gone
By: T.I. ft. Justin Timberlake

Ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone
And ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone

Ever had one of dem days, you wish woulda’ stayed home
Run into a group of niggas, getting they hate on
You walk by, they get wrong you reply
Then shit get blown
Way outta proportion, way past discussion
Just you against them, pick one then rush ’em
Figure you’ll get your head ?
That next, they don’t wanna stop
There now they bussin’, now you gushin’, ambulance
Rushin’ you to the hospital, with a bad concussion
Plus ya hit four times, plus it hit ya
Spine paralyzed waist down, now ya wheel chair bound
Never mind that now, you lucky to be alive
Just think it all started you, fussin’ with three guys
Now ya pride in the way, but ya pride is the way you
Could fuck around, get shot die any day
Niggas die, every day all over
Bull shit dope money dice, game ordinary hood shit
Could this be, ’cause of hip hop music
Or did the ones, with the good sense
Not use it, usually niggas
Don’t know what to do, when their back against the wall
So they just start shootin’
For red or for blue or for blo’ I guess
From Bankhead or from your projects
No more stress, now I’m straight
Now I get it now I take time to think
Before I make mistakes, just for my family’s sake
That part of me left yesterday, the heart of me is strong today
No regrets I’m blessed to say, the old me dead and gone away

Ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone
And ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone

I ain’t never been scared, I live through tragedy
Situation coulda been dead, lookin’ back at it
Most of that shit, didn’t even have to happen
But you don’t think about it, when you out there trappin’
In apartments hangin’, smokin’ and rappin’
Niggas start shit didn’t, next thing ya know we cappin’
Get locked up, then didn’t even get mad
Now think about damn, what a life I had
Most of that shit, look back just laugh
Some shit, still look back just sad
Maybe my homeboy, ’till be around
Had I not, hit the nigga
In the mouth that time, I won that fight, I lost that war
I can still see my nigga, walkin’ out that door
Who’da thought I’d never see, Philant no more
Got enough dead homies, I don’t want no more
Cost a nigga his job, cost me more
Ida took that ass-whoopin’, now for sure
Now think before I risk my life
Take them chances to get my stripe
A nigga put his hands on me alright
Otherwise stand there, talk shit all night
‘Cause I hit you, you sue me
I shoot you, get locked up, who me?
No more stress, now I’m straight
Now I get it now I take
Time to think, before I make mistakes
Just for my family’s sake
That part of me left yesterday
The heart of me is strong today
No regrets I’m blessed to say
The old me dead and gone away

Ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone
And ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone

I turn my head to the east
I don’t see nobody by my side
I turn my head to the west
Still nobody in sight
So I turn my head to the north
Swallow that pill
That they call pride
The old me is dead and gone
But the new me will be alright
I turn my head to the east
I don’t see nobody by my side
I turn my head to the west
Still nobody in sight
So I turn my head to the north
Swallow that pill
That they call pride
The old me is dead and gone,
But the new me will be alright

Ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone
And ooh, I’ve been travelin’ on this road too long
Just trying to find, my way back home
The old me, is dead and gone, dead and gone

Read more: T.I. – Dead And Gone Lyrics | MetroLyrics

Angels On The Moon

This is a song by Thriving Ivory, and I’ve been introduced to it while browsing through Youtube. It’s worth listening to, give it a go – I’ve linked the version that I listened to, the DHST one. It’s one of the songs that’s relatively not viewed that many times, but it’s a nice arrangement.

The part with Brother Bear, at the last time the chorus appears, it made me tear up. And, when the lyrics went “When no one’s left to take your side”, it’s honestly the one line that hits you in the heart, if you listened closely – it’s my favourite line in the whole song.


Angels On The Moon
By: Thriving Ivory

Do you dream that the world will know your name,
So tell me your name (tell me your name)
And do you care, about all the little things,
Or anything at all (or anything at all),

I wanna feel all the chemicals inside,
I wanna feel (I wanna feel),
I wanna sunburn just to know that I’m alive,
To know I’m alive (to know if I’m alive),

Don’t tell me if I’m dying,
Cause I don’t wanna know,
If I can’t see the sun,
Maybe I should go,
Don’t wake me cause I’m dreaming,
Of angels on the moon,
Where everyone you know,
Never leaves too soon

Do you believe in the day that you were born,
Tell me do you believe, (do you believe)
And do you know that every day’s the first of the rest of your life,

Don’t tell me if I’m dying,
Cause I don’t wanna know,
If I can’t see the sun,
Maybe I should go,
Don’t wake me cause I’m dreaming,
Of angels on the moon,
Where everyone you know,
Never leaves too soon,

This is to one last day in the shadows,
And to know a brothers love,
This is to New York City angels,
And the rivers of our blood,
This is to all of us,
To all of us,

So don’t tell me if I’m dying,
Cause I don’t wanna know,
If I can’t see the sun,
Maybe I should go,
Don’t wake me cause I’m dreaming,
Of angels on the moon,
Where everyone you know,
Never leaves too soon,

Yeah you can tell me,
All your thoughts about the stars,
That fill polluted skies,
And show me where you run to,
When no one’s left to take your side
But don’t tell me where the road ends,
Cause I just don’t wanna know,
No, I don’t wanna know,

Don’t tell me if I’m dying,
Don’t tell me if I’m dying.

Kyo Kara Maoh!

Recently, a friend introduced me to this manga series, Kyo Kara Maoh.

It was about a boy who was flushed down a toilet into another world, where he was their king. There’s a lot more here, but I would refrain from continuing.

It was originally a light novel, it would appear, and I would like to read that. Unfortunately, Japanese was not my third language, and the english translations for that was splotchy. I can understand what’s going on, but it does not catch my eyes. With the exception of some chapters, translated by different users online, they are generally quite hard to read. I’m still really glad there are some chapters online that I could read, though – at least this way, I could read a few chapters beyond the manga already translated.

Honestly, my main frustration was only with finding an english translation which is complete (that I have given up on, as everything was only three quarter finished) that is not the anime. There’s nothing much against the anime, except for the fact that I find the voice of the characters kind of shrill, and the art is not as brilliant as that of the manga, and the occasional illustration in the novel.

My favourite scene would forever and always be when Yuuri (the boy who was flushed down the toilet) slap Wolfram (bratty third prince of the previous Maoh). Go read it, you’d understand why it’s funny then.

Cry On My Shoulder

Actually, I’m not too sure who is the singer. According to some sources, it’s from Deutschland sucht den Superstar(DSDS), though from some videos, it’s said to be sung by Westlife.

It’s a touching song, personally, and it’s the sort of timeless classic that you can always listen to.


Cry On My Shoulder

If the hero never comes to you
If you need someone you’re feeling blue
If you wait for love and you’re alone
If you call your friends nobody’s home

You can run away but you can’t hide
Through a storm and through a lonely night
Then I’ll show you there’s a destiny
The best things in life they are free

But if you wanna cry
Cry on my shoulder
If you need someone
Who cares for you
If you’re feeling sad
Your heart gets colder
Yes I show you what real love can do

If your sky is grey oh, let me know
There’s a place in heaven where we’ll go
If heaven is a million years away
Oh, just call me and I’ll make your day

When the nights are gettin’ cold and blue
When the days are gettin’ hard for you
I will always stay here by your side
I promise you I’ll never hide

But if you wanna cry
Cry on my shoulder
If you need someone
Who cares for you
If you’re feeling sad
Your heart gets colder
Yes I show you what real love can do

But if you wanna cry
Cry on my shoulder
If you need someone
Who cares for you
If you’re feeling sad
Your heart gets colder
Yes I show you what real love can do

What real love can do
What real love can do
What love can do
What love can do
Love can do

Long Live

This is a song I’ve just dug up from my old collection from long, long ago – Long Live by Taylor Swift.

Here goes!


Long Live
By: Taylor Swift

I said remember this moment in the back of my mind
The time we stood with our shaking hands
The crowds in stands went wild
We were the Kings and the Queens
And they read off our names
The night you danced like you knew our lives
Would never be the same
You held your head like a hero
On a history book page
It was the end of a decade
But the start of an age

Long live
The walls we crashed through
How the kingdom lights shined
Just for me and you
I was screaming long live
All the magic we made
And bring on all the pretenders
One day,
We will be remembered

I said remember this feeling
I pass the pictures around
Of all the years that we stood there
On the side-lines wishing for right now

We are the Kings and the Queens
You traded your baseball cap for a crown
When they gave us our trophies
And we held them up for our town

And the cynics were outraged
Screaming, “This is absurd!”
Cause for a moment a band of thieves
In ripped up jeans got to rule the world

Long live
The walls we crashed through
How the kingdom lights shined
Just for me and you
I was screaming long live
All the magic we made
And bring on all the pretenders
I’m not afraid
Long live
All the mountains we moved
I had the time of my life
Fighting dragons with you
I was screaming long live
That look on your face
And bring on all the pretenders
One day,
We will be remembered

Hold on to spinning around
Confetti falls to the ground
May these memories break our fall

Will you take a moment,
Promise me this
That you’ll stand by me forever
But if God forbid fate should step in

And force us into a goodbye
If you have children some day
When they point to the pictures
Please tell them my name

Tell them how the crowds went wild
Tell them how I hope they shine

Long live
The walls we crashed through
I had the time of my life
With you

Long, long live
The walls we crashed through
How the kingdom lights shined
Just for me and you
And I was screaming long live
All the magic we made
And bring on all the pretenders
I’m not afraid
Singing, long live
All the mountains we moved
I had the time of my life
Fighting dragons with you
And long, long live
The look on your face
And bring on all the pretenders
One day
We will be remembered

Let the world go by

Sometimes, Rovina would lean against his headstone and watch the world go by.

Sure, she’s trying to let go, and she’s succeeding. Somewhat.

It’s just… hard, sometimes.

Her blood brother, her father, they were easy. They were gone too early, too fast for her to feel anything but regret and a ‘what if’, every now and then. That was inevitable. It was also easy to ignore.

Cladis, though.

Ashton to her, because that lying little critter never gave her his real name while he was alive. In the end, even the name she thought was his was just a pseudonym.

All Rise

This week, it shall be All Rise, because I’m really feeling it. Except, instead of the other person, I’m thinking of putting all my results onto trail, you know? I’ve been getting everything back and I’ve done so badly for all of the subjects that I’m holding a court session in my head and putting all of them on the stand. Even though it really feels like I’m the one on the stand, with my back against the wall, with all the results accusing me of lying and faking.

Here you go:


All Rise
By: Blue

Your honour please
Gotta believe what I say
What I will tell
Happened just the other day
I must confess
‘Cause had about enough
I need your help
Got to make this here thing stop

Baby I swear I tell the truth
(Uhuh)
About all the things you used to do
(Come on)
And if you thought you had me fooled
I’m tellin’ you now objection overruled
Here we go
(Oh baby)

One for the money and the free rides,
It’s two for the lie that you denied.
All rise
(All rise)
All rise
(All rise, all rise)
Three for the calls you’ve been making
It’s four for the times you’ve been faking
All rise
(I’m gonna tell it to your face)
All rise
(I rest my case)

You’re on the stand
With your back against the wall
Nowhere to run
And nobody you can call
Oh no
I just can’t wait
Now the case is open wide
You’ll try to pray
But the jury will decide

Baby I swear I tell the truth
(Uhuh)
About all the things you used to do
And if you thought you had me fooled
(Come on)
I’m tellin’ you now objection overruled
Oh baby

One for the money and the free rides
It’s two for the lie that you denied
All rise
(All rise)
All rise
(All rise, all rise)
Three for the calls you’ve been making
It’s four for the times you’ve been faking
All rise
(I’m gonna tell it to your face)
All rise
(I rest my case)

So step back ’cause
You don’t know this cat
I know deep down that
You don’t want me to react
I lay low
Leaving all my options open
The decision of the jury
Has not been spoken
Step in my house
You find that your stuff has gone
(Gone)
But in reality to whom
Does the stuff belong?
I bring you into court
To preach my order
And you know that
You overstep the border,
(Uhuh)

One for the money and the free rides
It’s two for the lie that you denied
(Ooh)
All rise
(All rise)
All rise
(All rise, all rise)
Three for the calls you’ve been making
(Yeah)
It’s four for the times you’ve been faking
All rise
(All rise, all rise)
All rise
(All rise, all rise)

One for the money and the free rides
(What you say)
It’s two for the lie that you denied
(Can’t you pay)
All rise
(What you’ve done)
All rise
Three for the calls you’ve been making
(What you say)
It’s four for the times you’ve been faking
(Can’t you pay)
All rise
(What you’ve done)
All rise
(Where you’ve gone)

One for the money and the free rides
It’s two for the lie that you denied
(Oh)
All rise
(Oh)
All rise
(Uhuh uhuh)
Three for the calls you’ve been making
It’s four for the times you’ve been faking
I said all rise
I’m gonna tell it
To your face
All rise, I rest my case
(Uhuh uhuh)

Say Goodbye

Learn to say goodbye.

It’s hard, but it’s inevitable. Someday, you’d have to say goodbye to everything you hold dear. Don’t let that catch you off guard. You cannot refuse to let go, either, son, because it isn’t always up to you.

That’s the first thing his father taught him.

It’s a lesson he never forgot, but it didn’t prepare him for the day he had to say goodbye to them. He wasn’t ready to be responsible for Mira, he wasn’t ready to say goodbye, to let go, but the doors closed and the tube retreated and –

They were gone.